florida

i'm going to compress the funeral into just a few sentences, there's going to be another bite and maybe an eyepatch... switching some scenes around, maybe... going to try to fine tune the conflict even more... think i'm starting to get things under control. might change the title? depending on whether i have time to develop the significance... one question i have is if the first person present tense is working, and if my transitions between flashback and dialogue are too choppy? hope you're all doing well with your stories. lunch was fun : )